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Day 34 – still not done

Yes, it is true, I am still a slacker. I’ve been doing some reading on my screenwriting books from the library. And I’ve realized something. I’ve made some mistakes in my formatting on my script. This is great news, because when I format it correctly I might end up with a page or two more than I have now. See, I haven’t been leaving a line between a parenthetical and the rest of the dialouge when a character is speaking. For instance, here is the way it is supposed to look (from one of my books):

JULIE
You still smoke?
(off Ben’s odd look)

Cigarette burn on your finger.

And here is the way I have been writing, using the same example:

JULIE
You still smoke? (off Ben’s odd look)
Cigarette burn on your finger.

I’m totally gonna have more pages than I thought. Booyah.

2 Comments

  1. Ha ha. I love it. You may already be done then. Just make all of your characters obsessive compulsive.

    JULIE
    You still smoke?
    (off Ben’s odd look)
    (turns to watch t.v.)
    (changes her mind)
    (goes to bathroom to wash hands)
    (changes her mind)
    (does wash hands, but at the kitchen sink)
    (picks up remote to watch t.v.)
    (realizing remote is dirty, washes hands again)
    (seeing the cigarette burn on Ben’s finger)

    Cigarette burn on your finger.

  2. admin

    June 18, 2007 at 3:13 pm

    ah, that’s good. You’re a genius, Joe. If you’d said this sooner I could have finished the entire script in like a day. No, an afternoon.

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